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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer


▶ Topic :

Some people think that universities should use their funds to support social activities for students. Other people think that this money should be used to improve food at university cafeterias instead. Which do you think better.

 


▶ Your Answer :

Some people think that universities should have funds to support social activities. They may think social activities are important factors for students. However, in my opinion universities have to spend money to improve their cafeterias. This is because cafeterias can provide healthy food and students can save their money.

 

To begin with, cafeterias can offer healthy food to students when they are supported by schools. Generally, students can reap many health benefits through healthy food such as relieving stress. As a result, it helps students more effective in their study. For example, there was a study conducted by the Korea food association with students as respondents. The study’s main purpose was to determine food affect students’ performance in school. There were two groups are monitored for 3 weeks. One group consisted of people who ate healthy food and another group was made up of people who ate junk food. Researchers gave them same directions and the result was are very intriguing. The former group students had better memory span than other group people. They said since healthy food made them more happy and relaxed, they could study with enjoyment. This showed that healthy food gave students benefits.

 

On top of that, students can save much money with cafeterias. If cafeterias provide high quality and low price food, they do not need to go to off-campus restaurants to eat. Generally, off-campus restaurants offer food with higher price than universities’ cafeterias. Therefore students who buy food on-campus can save their money. Let me take my experience as an example. When I was in college, my school’s cafeterias was one of the worst restaurant in the town. Therefore many people including me went to off-campus restaurants. It was very time-consuming and I had to spend a lot of money to get some food. One day, my college decided to renovate the cafeteria and new rules were set up to support cafeteria. Thanks to the college’s decision, I could use the cafeteria being provided high quality and low price food. Eventually, I could save so much money and I used my money on books. This proved that good cafeterias help students to save their money.

 

To sum up, I believe that colleges should have their money to improve cafeterias. This is due to the fact that students can gain health benefits and save their money.

 

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