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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic :How do movies or television influence people's behavior? 

▶ Your Answer :


    In contemporary society, movies and television shows have tremendous impact on people's mind and behavior since they are everywhere. I believe movies and televisions make people to set the standard of beauty in a certain way. Not only many people go through plastic surgery to look like movie stars, but also they spend lot of money on clothes what celebrities wore in the media. 

    First of all, media sets the standard of beauty by showing ideal face of celebrities. Today, plastic surgery makes a huge industry and it is keep growing. According to Korea Daily, one of the biggest news media in Korea, 78% of people who went through plastic surgery responded that they got the surgery because they wanted to look like a TV star. For instance, almost every TV stars in Korea has double eye lids and sharp nose, and many people go to hospital and ask doctors to fix their face to look like those celebrities. Celebrities in the movies and TV shows who look like barbie dolls make people unsatisfied with their own faces.

    Secondly, lot of people spend money on trendy fashion to look like famous TV show's main character. It is not an exaggeration to say that movies and TV shows are now becoming the most effective way to advertise certain style of clothes or accessories. My own experience explains this. When the famous American TV show Gossip girl was a hit, I purchased many hair bands that are similar to what the two main characters have worn in that show. Although I do not wear hair bands in general, it looked very attractive on the main character's hair which led me to buy some. I realized how the TV show could affect my view on beauty, even changing my fashion taste.

    In conclusion, I strongly believe TV and movies influence people to set the standard of beauty for two reasons. People go through medical surgery to look like stars in the movie and TV shows, and they consume trendy clothes after they watch movies and TV shows. 
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