라이팅 게시판

토플에세이도 쓰고 평가도 해보며, 여러분들의 의견을 주고 받는 곳입니다.

홈으로가기 HOME > TOEFL > 토플정보 > 라이팅 게시판

새해복 많이 받으시고 첨삭 감사드려요~

Myoryeo | 조회 96 | 추천 0
  • 2017.01.11
  • 글꼴
  • 확대
  • 축소

■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer


▶ Topic : children should use their time to play and study rather than to do household chores

▶ Your Answer :

A variety of opinions may exist over the argument that children should use their time to play and study rather than to do household chores. As far as I am concerned, I totally disagree that children would better spend their time playing and studying rather than doing household chores. The following two ideas can be valid evidences to back up my opinion. First, every family member has a responsibility to do household chores. Second, children can be rewarded by doing household chores.

To start with, it is unfair for parent to do all of household chores. In fact, household chores are hard tasks and require great amount of time. In the past, mothers usually had few time to do what they liked because they should have done all of household chores. However, in the modern society, many people agree that mothers also have the rights to own their private time. In my case, my mother could have only a few hours to take a rest because she had a lot to do. So, my sister and I decided to help my mother by washing dishes and cleaning living room. Consequently, my mother could spend much time reading books or watching TV. This corroborates with my insistence that children should do household chores because they also have duties to do household chores.

On top of that, children can be rewarded by helping their parents. To be specific, children are proud of themselves and feel a sense of accomplishment when they help their parents by doing household chores. Also, parents can give pocket money or small presents to their children as rewards, which make children be happy. For example, when I was a child, I received a chocolate bar as the reward. Because I really liked it, doing household chores was a good opportunity for me to get what I really wanted. Consequently, I began to enjoy it because every moment I finished to do household chores, not only I felt proud of myself but also I was rewarded by chocolate bars. This anecdote shows how important it is for children to do household chores.

To sum up, children have a responsibility to do household chores. Also, doing household chores provides children with chances to get what they want. In this regard, I completely side with perspective that children should use their time to do household chores rather than to play and study for aforementioned reasons.

글쓰기 답변 수정 삭제 목록으로 퍼가기▼
  • 페이스북으로 보내기
  • 트위터로 보내기
  • URL 복사

93,299개(59/4665페이지)
라이팅 게시판
번호 제목 글쓴이 조회수 날짜
92139 답글 [독립형] RE:잘 못하지만 첨삭 부탁드려요 ㅠㅠ!~! 44 2017.01.20
92138 [첨삭] 새해 복 많이 받으세요~ 따끔한 첨삭 부탁드려요~ 24plus 94 2017.01.11
92137 답글 [첨삭] RE:새해 복 많이 받으세요~ 따끔한 첨삭 부탁드려요~ 45 2017.01.20
92136 [독립형] 늘 큰 도움 주셔서 감사합니다. 첨삭 부탁드려요. histitch 106 2017.01.11
92135 답글 [독립형] RE:늘 큰 도움 주셔서 감사합니다. 첨삭 부탁드려요. [1] 49 2017.01.20
92134 [통합형] 통합형입니다. 따끔한 지적 달게 받겠습니다. Myoryeo 101 2017.01.11
92133 답글 [통합형] RE:통합형입니다. 따끔한 지적 달게 받겠습니다. 56 2017.01.20
>> [독립형] 새해복 많이 받으시고 첨삭 감사드려요~ Myoryeo 97 2017.01.11
92131 답글 [독립형] RE:새해복 많이 받으시고 첨삭 감사드려요~ 50 2017.01.20
92130 [첨삭] 현우의도전12 곧시험입니다 감사합니다! 현우 99 2017.01.10
92129 답글 [첨삭] RE:현우의도전12 곧시험입니다 감사합니다! 69 2017.01.19
92128 [첨삭] 첨삭 부탁드립니다!! 김한솔 99 2017.01.10
92127 답글 [첨삭] RE:첨삭 부탁드립니다!! 53 2017.01.19
92126 [독립형] 첨삭 부탁드려요. 고맙습니다 ^^ FN-FAL 97 2017.01.10
92125 답글 [독립형] RE:첨삭 부탁드려요. 고맙습니다 ^^ 51 2017.01.19
92124 [독립형] 가르쳐주신대로 열심히 배우겠습니다. 잘부탁드립니다^^ 마지막노력 106 2017.01.10
92123 답글 [독립형] RE:가르쳐주신대로 열심히 배우겠습니다. 잘부탁드립니다^^ 48 2017.01.19
92122 [독립형] 가르쳐주신대로 열심히 배우겠습니다. 잘부탁드립니다^^ 마지막노력 94 2017.01.10
92121 답글 [독립형] RE:가르쳐주신대로 열심히 배우겠습니다. 잘부탁드립니다^^ 빗방울 78 2017.01.18
92120 [통합형] 가르쳐주신대로 열심히 배우겠습니다. 잘부탁드립니다^^ 마지막노력 73 2017.01.10