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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer


▶ Topic : Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, e-mail, or telephone calls.

▶ Your Answer : Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, e-mail, or telephone calls.

 

Many people believe that face-to-face communication is better than other modes of communication. However, I strongly disagree with the statement. The man-to-man conversation can lead to bad results. And there are several reasons feedback on my opinion.

 

First, the one-to-one conversation requires many things. In order to the man-to-man conversation, a lot of things are required. What I mean is that, a years ago, when I was going to meet my friends, I did not arrive the place because of traffic jams. Also, when I fought with my best friend, there were more worst situation, talking face-to-face. Then, when I came back home, I sent e-mail to my friend after I organized my thoughts. After that, we could become a good friend once more. And, when I went to school, I was very a shy student in my major class. So, it was hard time to me asking to my professor directly. However, I always received a high grade because though sending e-mail.

 

Second, it can be more convenient communication by developing of technology. There are several methods that can be convenient though the internet, online-chatting and using e-mail. For example, according to survey, many people more prefer the methods using telephone calls or e-mail than talking the man-to-man conversation. The big reason is that it is because the other party can do two things, talking with others. The second reason is that time is gold, they do not have to spend their own time. The cellphone makes it possible to talk as if by the side. For instants, there is the mobile phone which most using technology for people. Especially, like text message can choose discreetly than one-to-one communication. Also, the up-to-date technology communication uses in the business like companies. When workers present the presentation for their boss, the workers can conduct a meeting more easily. According to a research investigation, when people progressing in front of many people, it was able to get better effect using the development of technology machine.

 

By developing the technology, the skills are growing and also people too. The telephone calls(cellphone), online-chatting and e-mail can reduce the unnecessary things, and these ways can be more convenient for many people. For these reason, I think that the one-to-one communication is not better than other forms of communication.  

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