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저번토플 템플릿썼는데 리밋나왔던사람이에요 ㅠㅠ 첨삭 온정의 손길 부탁드립니다.

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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer


▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Innovation is always a positive thing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

▶ Your Answer :
 The majority of people in their early to mid-twenties think that innovation can be a negative thing. This notion, however, does not reflect the stance that I hold and should be thought about in a different light. I believe that innovation can always be positive because it enables people to broaden perspectives and enjoy a better quality of life.
 First, Innovation allows people to broaden perspectives. Interestingly, it has been a topic on various social network services such as Twitter where people hold different opinions. Initially I thought that innovation could be a negative thing. However, after reading relevant tweet feeds, I realized that people would not broaden perspectives if there were no innovation. This is because many transportation technologies were developed through innovation. So people had many opportunities to visit foreign countries by airplane or train. They enhanced their awareness as they traveled around the world.
 Second, innovation allows people to enjoy a better quality of life. Interestingly, a renowned social scientist in Korea published an article in The Korean Herald last Tuesday which claims that innovation allows people get the largest boost to their happiness. His study was particularly interesting because it supported my view. The article claimed that 62 percent of 200 Korean people believe that innovation enables people to get away from their daily routines. They can experience new and different activities by innovative equipment such as laptop. They can also appreciate these moments by enjoying convenient technologies like internet. I thought of this report because the results of the survey resonated with my thoughts.
 To sum up, I believe that innovation can always be positive: broadening perspectives of people and enjoying a better quality of life. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned above.
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