▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that the antlers of male
deer function as a crucial organ. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up
several points that contradict this argument.
First of all, the speaker argues that the antlers of male
deer are not one of the main factors for attracting mates. The
male deers have other methods to capture female deer’s attention such as making sounds and displaying certain
body postures. Also, when the potential mates have big
antlers, female deers tend to choose those with small antlers. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that the antlers of male
deers are used to draw female deer’s attention since
female deers consider the size of antlers when selecting mates. (deer의 복수형은 deers가 아니라 deer입니다. 또한 마지막 문장은 더 설명이 필요합니다. 본문에는 사슴의 뿔이
암컷을 끌어드리는 역할을 하지 않는다고 했는데, 마지막 문장에는 사슴의 뿔이 암컷을 유혹할 때 필요한
사항처럼 말씀하셔서 논리적으로 앞뒤가 맞지 않습니다.)
In addition, the speaker insists that the antlers are
not served do not serve as the forms of visual mark. In
fact, the male deers usually use their own secretion instead of leaving
certain evidence in their territory in order to be detected much easier by
other deers. The main reason of this unusual behavior is due to the fact
that they shed their soft exterior skin. This counters the reading passage’s
assertion that male deers make use of antlers to leave signs of their
territory by rubbing against the trees.
Finally, the lecturer maintains that deer do not hold any
defend mechanisms. Ironically, male deers’s antlers are
removed during the winter season when they are highly vulnerable. Furthermore,
the female deers also have to safeguard their offspring against potential
predators. However, females do not have the same organ unlike mail deer. This
refutes the reading passage’s explanation that the actual purpose of antlers is
the function of protecting their head and neck against voracious predators.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
Score |
24 |
Overall
Comment: |
잘 쓰셨어요. 두 본문의 내용을 잘
비교해 주셨습니다. 다만 앞서 설명을 드렸듯이 논리적으로 구멍이 조금 있어서 감점을 드렸습니다. 또 위헤 수정해 드렸던 문법 오류들 (특히
복수형 오류가 많으셨어요)만 조심해 주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. |
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