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A thought provoking current issue concerns that letting a friend make a mistake is more helpful than saying something or doing directly to a friend. (giving advice가 더 적절합니다) Some people thinks that leaving a friend to make a mistake is better for the friendship. However, in my opinion, for true friendship we should say or do something and let a friend know realize a mistake that he or she have has done.
To begin with, a friend can reiterate his or her mistakes. As humans are imperfect, we sometimes make various mistakes. More importantly, not only the fact that we everyday make mistakes everyday but also the fact that we can learn from mistakes is crucial. We can learn from mistakes by contemplating why it did happened to us. And if a mate made a mistake, we can trace several reasons and find solutions together. (mate보다 friend가 더 자연스러워요. Mate는 짝, 아니면 friend의 slang인 표현입니다.) In this case, it is less likely for a mate to repeat the mistake because he or she have has found some faults, or at least knows that he or she have has made a mistake. (or을 쓰실 때는뒤에 오는 명사가 단수일 때는 have가 아니라 has가 맞아요.) But if we just do not talk about a mistake, chances for doing the same mistake would increase.
In addition, if a friend makes a mistake, we can assume that it could be the an unspoken signal that a mate needs helps or advice. Some people tends not to not ask a favour favor because of bashfulness, or just unwillingness not to reveal their weak points even to their friends. In this the case a mate needs helps, and if we do not say or do anything about the mistake or just ignore that it, a mistake could be turn more serious. To prevent problems, it is better to say or do something for a mate.
To encapsulate, a friend can repeat a mistake, and a mistake might be the signal that a friend needs helps. (need help가 맞아요. helps라는표현은 help가 동사로 쓰일때만 사용합니다.) So in conclusion, I think that to say or do do doing something for a mistake is definitely morebetter than simply doing nothing.
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위에 지적해 드렸듯이 문법 오류가 너무 많으셔서 감점을 드렸습니다. a / the 차이를 숙지하셔야 하고, 단수 / 복수 형태에 사용되는 동사의 차이도 연습하셔야 할 것 같아요. 본문은 설득력이 있지만 문법 오류가 너무 많아서 전달이 잘 안 되었던 점이 아쉬웠습니다.