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Some people, think that the extended family is less important. However, in my opinion, relationships with extended family members, such as grandparents and cousins, have more important. The reasons are that more grandparents involved in raising children and family traditions are still important.
First, grandparents are helping to raise children. That is because it is related to changing of the parents' role in modern society. In these days, parents often have jobs, and inevitably, it caused a lack of spending time with their children. Thus, parents are needed trustworthy persons who can ask to foster their children. For instance, when I was a little, my parents worked, so my grandmother took care of my sister and me in her house. While my mother isworking, my sister and I could receive affection and care as well as protection in a safe environment, which my mother had appreciated, from my grandmother. Obviously, grandparents are playing an important role in looking after the kids. We are an important part of each other’s lives.
On top of that, family-related traditions are still considered significant. Every year, thousands of people visit their families when special occasion, such as Christmas, Thanksgiving Day. Even though they may seem to live apart from each other, people still spend time with extended families during holidays. According to one survey conducted by the Korean government, the majority of Korean who are not living with their extended families expressed a desire to visit them, and at the same time, they thought that it is important. Korea is a country where it seems to be less important their families, so this trend is very notable.
To sum up, extended family members give a great benefit to raise kids. Also, family traditions are regarded as a mean activity. In this view, I feel that the extended family is as core to people’s lives as it was in the past. |