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The lecturer thinks school uniforms are not effective in many ways while the reading passage gives good sides of school uniforms. /문단 나누어주세요/ First, the reading passage argues argued that schools we can verify thefts in school who don't wear uniforms. To argue this opinion, the lecturer says said that school uniforms and crime rate are not related relative much. When uniforms were introduced in California, the crime rate in school was even still high.
Second, the reading passage insists that school uniforms can give team sprit and unity to students when there are in school events. In On the other hand, the lecturer says said that students don't necessarily necesserily need uniforms to build up the team spirit sprist and team unity. 근거로 제시한 detail까지 같이 요약해주세요.
Lastly, the lecturer points out the weakness weakeness of the the reading passages has. The reading passage explains that students don't need to spend money following to follow up popular fashion and be distracted by wealthy students through wearing school uniforms. But lecturer gives gave an example of statistic rates of schools in good and bad districts. distrinct. Rich schools don't force students to wear uniforms while poor schools still have school uniforms. So it means that the reading passage does not make sense. And the lecturer claims said that school uniforms suppress individuality of students. 내용이 너무 많습니다. 불필요한 내용을 제거하고 lecture가 '어떤 근거로' '무엇이라' 반박하는지만 남겨서 정리해주세요.
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3
두 지문의 대립구도나 각 본론의 대립 point를 잘 잡아주신 점이 좋았어요. 하지만 어떤 본론은 내용이 부족하고, 어떤 본론은 필요 이상으로 내용이 많이 설명되어 있어서 감점요인들이 되었어요. 기본적으로 [reading의 주장-lecture의 반박주장-lecture가 그렇게 반박한 이유]를 정리한다고 생각하고 핵심 detail들을 요약하시면 쉽게 글을 만들 수 있어요. 요약문은 내용상 필요한 부분이 아니면 현재시제로 정리해주는 것이 좋으니 이 부분도 참고해주세요~ 오탈자도 같이 체크해주세요! 수고 많으셨습니다~!
A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |