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In these days, a ton of movies are is made inside of artificial sets, and a lot of images in the movies are created by computer
graphics. Although the development of modern technology can create a new
world that does not exist in real, the movies that were taken in real life have some realistic stories with
information about the country itself. By watching them, people get to know
about a country in two major aspects.
First, movies show us such
splendid sceneries of certain countries on the screen. To be specific, I know
some great movies which show can see the magnificent mountain range in New Zealand,
a speechless golden wheat field in the
United States, and stunning colors of wineries in France. What I watched are
not a documentary about their nature. The
film, however, is Not only do the films showing the places, but they it can give people a clue as to
what how the natural environment of the country looks like. In other words, movies show
us the unique scenery that can only be seen in a certain country. there. '영화가 그 나라에 대해서 많은 것을 말해준다'라는 점이 나의 입장이므로 영화에 잘 나타나는 그 나라의 풍경이 그 나라에 대해 알게 해 주는 중요한 부분이라는 점을 강조해서 설명하면 설득력을 더 높일 수 있어요.
Second, the movies tell us the
uniqueness of custom in the country. 바로 사례를 제시하기 전에 영화에 어떻게 그 나라의 문화가 드러나는지, 이것이 왜 그 나라에 대해 잘 알게 되는 것이라고 보는지를 설명해주세요. For instance, when you can find
peculiarities of Japanese culture in a movie, you can easily assume that a
movie has Japan as a background. I have seen the one which is related to a
costume maker in Japan. In the film, all the characters showed the way of
greeting, clothing, eating, and ways of social interaction with the strangers
reflecting traditional Japanese customs. Having an experience of foreign
customs through on the screen made me know more about Japanese culture. Therefore,
watching movies coming to a certain culture gives viewers an idea how the
custom is in a specific society.
To conclude, movies have great
merits in that people can know knowing other countries. They have lots of sceneries of a country must-sees and jaw-droppings. 멋진 풍경을 많이 보여준다는 점이 핵심이 아니라, 특정 국가의 풍경이 드러나기 때문에 그 나라에 대해 잘 알게 해준다는 점이 요지이므로 이 부분을 결론문단에도 잘 정리해주어야 해요. Also, they are good materials that allow us to
know the characteristic customs of the country.
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 Comment :
그 나라의 풍경을 보여주고 문화를 드러내기 때문에 그 나라에 대해 잘 알게 해준다는 주장이 좋았어요. 바로 사례를 연결하면 논리 구성 측면에서 점수를 받기 어렵기 때문에 사례 이전에 설명 부분을 3-4문장 정도 충분히 제시할 수 있게끔 신경쓰시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning - May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary - 일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함 - 문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남 - 문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음 - 답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함 |