해해■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : A budget deficit occurs when the government spends more than it taxes. To overcome this problem, the government needs to reduce the amount of money it pays. Which of the following do you think the government should decrease its spending on?
-Art -Parks -Public transit
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▶ Your Answer : When the government gets in trouble with taxes, they should reduce the amount of money for something. People might argue that the government has to cut down money for the art and for the public transit. However I strongly believe that the parks should be the first one to be chosen.
First of all, if the government reduce money for art, it would takes too much time to build art facilities when it can afford to spend money on art later. It means that parks requires less time and professional technologies to be built than art facilities such as museums, galleries. Normally you build parks where there is plenty of empty space and they are aim for only small group of people who live around them. On the contrary, for example, to build museums, it needs much time to examine the circumstances around the places where museums will be built. Many professionals ,such as designers, constructors, architectures. get together so many times before you build museums. On the other hand, we can simply construct parks by planting some of trees and flowers and install a number of benches and trash cans and cover the surfaces of parks with cement or soft soil or rubber materials. We can just pause making parks for a period of time and it will not let building art facilities complicated.
In addition, not all people are able to utilize parks everyday. What I mean is that some may own their cars while almost every ordinary people go to their works or to schools using public transportation by bus, by train or by subway. Therefore, the money expense for the public transit takes a great part in their budget. In this situation, what if the government reduces supporting the public transit? They might be in big trouble at the end. Moreover, these people cannot visit parks whenever they want to because they have to do other things in a day. They cannot sit and look around in parks or play a sports game in parks in the middle of their routine. Therefore parks are not necessary for ordinary people in their lives. When they want to spend time to rest or have fun, they will just go visit big amusement parks or take a trip with plenty of time.
In conclusion, I would say that we should reduce the budget for parks. We have to focus on how often parks are used by most of the people. We should not waste of time and money with limited taxes.
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첨삭부탁드리겠습니다.
*토픽 제시글에서는 관사 없이 art, parks, public transit이라고만 되어있길래 저는 관사를 넣어야하는 줄 알고
the art, the parks, the public transit이라고 적었는데 ㅁ문제집 모범답안에보면 관사 없이 썼더라구요. ㅠ 어떻게 해야할지..ㅠ
3월 토플에서는 운좋게도 통합 good을 받았지만 늘 오프가 아닐까 의심하면서 풀어서 ㅠㅠ
감사합니다.